AJHQ is trying to make AJ into AJPW? Comic, and The Adventure Chapter 2 and 3 Review!

Me: HELP ME!!!!!!!!!
You guys: What is it o.o
Me: MY TAIL BLEW AWAY!!!!
You guys: Your what?!  
Me: MY TAIL!!
You guys: O.O O.O O.O
Me: MY TAIL ARMOR I MEANT!!
You guys: Oh! Phew!
Me: HELP ME FIND ITTTT!!
You guys: Well, what does it look like?
Me: 
You guys: Those are leaves.
Me: NO! THOSE ARE TAIL ARMOR!!!!
You guys: Errrr
Me: THEY GO ON THE TAIL!
You guys: Uhhhh how do they stay on...
Me: I glue them! :D
You guys: Thennnn uhhhhhhhhh how did it get off?
Me: It started raining glue remover :/
You guys: Uhh uhh *gulps*
Me: Nvm.. I guess I'll go lookin for leaves.
You guys: Not like there is a forest or anything...
Me: Lets go to.. Mt Shiveer to find leaves..
You guys: That's not where you find leaves..
Me: IT IS TOO! AHA! FOUND THEM! :D
You guys: Sarah?
Me: *glues on leaves* Mhm?
You guys: Do you have.. err
Me: Mhm?
You guys: Nvm... just.. just get on with the post.
Me: Oki, this intro is getting long anyways :)
You guys: *sigh*

Ehehee that was a long intro, but heyyyy Jammers! Sarahkey8 with another post!

Today we are talking about, is AJHQ trying to turn regular Animal Jam into Animal Jam Play Wild?

Right now I only really have two pictures to 'feed' my theory suuuuu if you have noticed anything else then let me know!
First of all, the Jamaa Journal!
They changed the original Jamaa Journal



To this one:

Compared to the one on Play Wild

Photo credit Graciepopstar91 on the Animal Jam Community

Pretty similar! I really liked the old Jamaa Journal, the new one doesn't even look like a newspaper, more like a billboard?

2. Pet Lynxes (Animal Jam)  vs. Pet Ocelots (Play Wild)
Okay pretty much all of you have seen the pet ocelots from Animal Jam Play Wild! 
AWWW SO ADORABLE! *coughs*
In the latest update, AJHQ have made a new pet, the pet lynx!

Doesn't that look a lot like pet ocelots?   

That's all I have on that 'theory'  

Has anybody thought that it would be really amazing if AJPWHQ added oceans to AJPW? 

Seriously that would be so prettyyyy 

And now I have a small comic for you. 

uhhhhh hope you enjoyed?

And now to reviewww The Adventure, Chapter 2!  

Chapter 2 The Talk and Kidnapped!

The title. Just the title. "The Talk and Kidnapped!" 

That's professional guys!

Around ten they crawled into their sleeping bags. Dove noticed that Velvet had a flashlight, and her Bible with her. “I hope she reads it.” Dove said silently. Dove pulled out her mini New Testament Bible. She read 1st John chapter 5. After she finished she prayed and went to sleep. Strangely enough, around one o'clock she woke up! 

Why is there an exclamation mark there.. oh well.... O.o 

She looked over to Velvet's sleeping bag, and saw a dim light from inside the sleeping bag. Then she heard the flipping of pages. Dove climbed down the ladder silently and looked up at the stars. “Lord. Please show Velvet the light, help her to know you. And I pray that Ember would too, help her to open their hearts to you. Open both their hearts. In your name. Amen.” Dove prayed. She sat down on the wet, dewy grass, and looked at the stars, thinking. Praying.....

Get it, the light? And she's using the flashlight ahahahahaa  

 "Help open her to open their hearts to you."

Oh goodness.. Oh my... 

“Dove?” Dove jumped up startled. She whirled around. “Velvet?!” she exclaimed. “Shh! Are you trying to wake up Ember?” Dove jumped down the ladder. “What are you doing up so late?” Velvet asked “I should ask you the same question, I saw the flashlight, I heard the flipping of pages. You were reading the Bible, weren't you?” Dove asked. “Well, yeah. It's so interesting!” Velvet exclaimed Dove smiled. 

I love how they are both saying things loudly here, and then Velvet is just like "Are you trying to wake up Ember?"

Tehehe

“Do you want to pray?” Dove asked “N-not right now, I'm not ready. Maybe later...” Velvet said “But Velvet! What if there is no later? You don't know what will happen!” Dove said “I'm not good enough!” Velvet whispered

“That is true. None of us our!” Dove exclaimed, this time not caring if she was raising her voice,

“Then how can Jesus come into my heart?” Velvet demanded 

“He died on the cross, ask him to forgive your sins! He will! When he died on the cross, he does for our sins. It may be now or never!”

Velvet burst into tears. “How do you know? Did he tell you that?” she asked 

“No, he didn't. But it could be true! You have no idea if this very night your life could end!” Dove said through tears.

"But it could be true!" 

Yes, that's convincing! 

“Dove.. I'm sorry. Not right now.. Not right now..” Velvet whispered. 

Dove sighed sadly. “Okay.. But do you know when Snowy is going to be here?” she asked. 

“Snowy said tomorrow. She's a Christian right?” Velvet asked. “Yes.” Dove answered. “Are you sure you don't want to do it?” Dove asked quietly. “Yes. Maybe tomorrow. Maybe..” Velvet said They sat side by side looking at the sky. Watching the sunrise. 

Mmm beautiful. *sniffs*

Dove opened her eyes, she noticed Velvet was sleeping. “Velvet wake up.” Dove said “Huh wha?” Velvet asked sleepily “Wake up! It's morning!” said Dove Velvet jumped up. “Hey guys! What are you doing out there?” laughed Ember as she climbed down the treehouse. “Nothing just looked at the forest.” “Um guys, I'm sorry but.. My mom called and said we are going on vacation.” “Cool! But we will miss you a lot.” Velvet said. “Yeah, I'm sorry guys! Well seeya guys later!” Ember grabbed her backpack, packed all her stuff, and headed back. Dove looked at Velvet. 

"My mom called and said we are going on vacation" 

Its probably because I wanted Ember out of the way? 

"Cool! But we will miss you a lot"

Also, where is she even going on vacation!? 

“So what do you want to do?” Dove asked Velvet. “Explore more of the woods?” Velvet asked taking out a map. “Sure!” Suddenly they both heard an eagle above them. “Who is that?” Dove asked, “I don't know.” “Hi guys!” said a voice, they both turned and saw a white otter. “Hello Snowy!” Velvet greeted them. Suddenly they heard the eagle again!

              "They both heard an eagle above them"

What's so unusual about that?.. 

Also I just love how Snowy just pops up, even though they are exploring XD 

 They looked up and saw an eagle swoop towards them! “Run!” Snowy exclaimed they all started running as fast as they could, Suddenly Dove heard Velvet scream. She turned around and saw the eagle swoop down and grab Velvet. It quickly lifted her into the air. “VELVET!” Snowy screamed “NOOOOO! VELVET!” screamed Dove. “DOOOVVVEEEE!” Dove noticed a strange symbol on the eagle's wing. Dove and Snowy tried to catch up with the eagle but it was quickly out of sight. They both had tears in their eyes. “What are we going to do?” Snowy wailed 

"the eagle swoop down and grab Velvet"

How about.. "The eagle swooped down and grabbed Velvet"?  

This scene is emotional.

ALSO HOW DID DOVE SEE THAT SYMBOL!? THE EAGLE WAS UP IN THE AIR! 

“P-pray.” Dove said. Snowy nodded. They both bowed their heads. “Dear Lord.. H-help us find Velvet, help her to know you, please... please help us find her..” Snowy prayed. “Lord, you know where Velvet is, bring her back to us. Open her heart Lord.. Please...” “Should we go tell Mom?” Dove asked. Snowy sighed. Snowy stood up. “We can find her, I brought my bow. Do you have your twin Samurai swords your.. um, your Dad gave you before he left?” Snowy asked. Dove nodded, she took the twin Samurai swords out of her backpack and put them on her back.

Why did her Dad give her  those swords. She is like.. 14? I don't know actually XD I probably wrote it in the book somewhere though.

 Dove noticed Snowy was already wearing her bow. “Cmon, it went this way. We will find her. The Lord will help us.” Snowy said “Your right.” replied Dove. So they set out to find their lost friend. “Did you see that symbol on the eagle's wing?” Snowy asked “Yes.. I wonder what it means, it was almost like a Phantom's lighting..” Dove said thoughtfully. They walked for miles and miles, even until it was dark! “Lets.. take.. a break.” Snowy said breathlessly Dove nodded and sat on a stump while Snowy leaned on against a tree. She sighed.

"she was already wearing her bow"

Oh goodness.. They have paws, how are they suppose to shoot the arrow??? 

Oh well. 

 “Why did that eagle take Velvet Dove wondered. “I don't know..” Snowy said. “I wish it would've been me..” Dove said sadly. “You can't change what's done.” Snowy said giving Dove a sad smile. “But, why? If I may ask.” “She isn't a Christian, she has been reading her Bible, but she said she's not ready.” Dove explained “Oh, well, I hope she opens her heart to the Lord.” Snowy said looking up. 

"But, why? If I may asked." 

Gee I don't know..... totally not what every single hero says when one of their friends get captured.. *coughs*    

Here, I'll just do Chapter 3 as well sense I have nothing else to do XD

Chapter 3 All Alone

“Lets get going now.” Dove said as she got up. “I think that eagle headed towards that mountain.” Snowy said pointing. “O.K. Lets go.” They both got up, put their backpacks on, then their weapons on top of the backpacks. After getting to the base of the mountain. They started up the mountain. After about an hour they came to a narrow cliff. “Be.. careful..” Snowy said as she slowly moved across the cliff. Dove followed. 

"Be.. careful.." 

No, lets just waltz on the edge of the cliff like this!

Believe me, its not dangerous! 😁😁

Suddenly the spot Snowy was on gave way! “Snowy!” Dove exclaimed and quickly grabbed her paws. Dove tried to pull her up but the weight was too much, Snowy's weight was pulling her! “Dove!.. let... go! I'll.. be.. fine!” Snowy said, her voice was strained, “No! Not... letting... you...go!” Dove grunted. “Let go! Or we'll both fall!” Snowy cried “No! Not letting you go!.. we.. will save... Velvet... together!” “The Lord will help you..” Dove was pulled more and more with Snowy's weight.

Yeah Snowy, no more doughnuts for you, ever ever! 

“Let go.”

“I can't!”

“You can! Please.. I want.. at least.. one of us to survive.. to tell.. our parents..”

“No!” Dove screamed 

“I will go to a better place.”

“Please no! I wont... let you leave!” Dove said her voice strained

“Goodbye Dove..” Snowy whispered and let go.

Dove: "WAIT WHAT DID YOU SAY?!" 

Why did she whisper it, does that make it more traumatic? 

“Nooooo! SNOWYYY!” Dove cried Dove watched horrified as she saw her friend's body fall down the steep cliff and into the water below. Dove burst into tears. Suddenly the same eagle that had kidnapped Velvet swooped down from the top of the mountain, dove into the water and pulled out a limp Snowy. Then flew back up. “Lord why! Why!” she cried. “Help me.. Both of my friends are gone.. I need you.. please.. Help me to find them.. help them to be safe..” Dove wept, This wasn't a game like they played in their treehouse. It was real life. She wanted her friends back. She curled up into a ball and cried until she fell asleep, 

Perfect timing eagle! *claps* 

“Dove wake up.” Snowy's voice? “She's had a rough day. Leave her.” Velvet's voice! Dove slowly got up. “Velvet?! Snowy?!” Dove exclaimed “Yes.” Snowy said with a smile. “I-I did it Dove.” Velvet said. “Did what? Pray?!” Dove exclaimed “Yes!” Velvet answered. “That's wonderful! I can't believe it!” Dove said hugging Velvet and Snowy. “We should try to escape” Velvet said. 

Dove woke up, this time for real. She slowly got up. 

This time for real, *screams* WE GOT A ECHO'S FROM THE EDGE SITUATION!!! WHEN SHE WOKE UP AGAIN SHE WAS IN ANOTHER DREAM!! 

Wait, this means there are more then 3 Dove's! Dove from earth yellow, and Dove from earth red, and Dove from earth blue! :D  

You guys: Wut...

Oh uh nvm! 

“Lord. Help me on this mission. Help me to find Velvet and Snowy. Again I pray that you would open up Velvet's heart. Help her to pray. In your name, Amen.” Dove climbed and climbed. Then a stone broke loose below her! Before she could react she fell onto the ledge below, and for some reason, a flood of memories about her dad rushed back.

"and for some reason, a flood of memories about her dad rushed back" 

So she had amnesia before? 

Her fourth Birthday:

“Happy Birthday to you, happy Birthday to you! Happy Birthday dear Dove, Happy Birthday to you!” her Mother Otter and Father Otter sung. Little Dove blew out the candles. Mother and Father clapped. “All in one blow!” Father said proudly. “Good job.” Mother said smiling. “The Lord has blessed with a wonderful daughter.” Mother said. Dove giggled and hugged her mom and dad. “Cake and ice cream now?” Dove wondered. Mother and Father laughed. “Yes, I'll cut it.” Mother said “We love you Lil'Dove.” Father said. Dove giggled and Mother and Father laughed.

"All in one blow!" Father said proudly" 

Yes. yes. yesss! 

Her eighth Birthday: 

“Open it.” Her mom said, giving Dove a package. Dove tore into the wrapping and took out a golden colored Bible! “Oh it's beautiful! Thank you!” Dove exclaimed giving her parents a hug. “We both signed our names.” Father Otter said. Dove opened the Bible and saw the names. “Thank you so much!” Dove said. “And now, to sing happy Birthday!” Mother Otter said, as she went into the kitchen to get the cake. 

CAKE! GIVE MI THE CAKEEEEEE 

"she tore into the wrapping"

Greedy little kid! 

The day her Dad disappeared: (6 years after her eighth Birthday) 

Mother Otter said goodbye to Father Otter. “Goodbye Father.” Dove said. “Goodbye sweetie, I have a gift for you.” Father Otter said “Really?” Dove asked “Really.” Father Otter said with a smile. He pulled out a package and gave it to Dove. “Be careful while opening it.” he warned Dove opened it carefully, she gasped when she saw what it held.”Twin Samurai Swords! I-I can't believe it! Thank you so much!” she exclaimed and gave her father a big hug. “Are you really going to fight the Phantoms?” Dove asked. Father Otter nodded. “Yes, and when I return Jamaa will be free once again!” “I can't wait for that day.” Dove whispered “Me too. Now I gotta get going.” “Bye Dad!” Dove called as he went out the door, “Goodbye Hudson!” Mother Otter called after him. So Father Otter left to join the war. 

Okay, so she is.. 15? 16? I'm guessing this is like 'adventure' happens a few years after?
You guys: You're the author!
Me: Soo?

You guys: You should know her age! 

Dove woke up with eyes wide. She got up and rubbed her head. “W-what happened?” she asked. But then remembered what had happened. She noticed that the sun was rising. Dove prayed. Then slowly climbed the mountain. She gasped when she finally reached the top. She ducked down, grabbed her phone from the backpack, texted her mom to tell the Alphas and come to her location and hit send. For sitting on the mountain was   

SHE HAD A PHONEEE!?!??!!?!?! WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAATTTTTTTTTTTTTTT

PLOT TWIST

Gee we can't tell what is on the mountain, that she would have to tell the Alphas! 

*facepalms*  

So uh, that's all for now Jammers! Seeya next Wednesday! (Inless I: Get sick, go on vacation, forget to post, or am so busy that I can't post :)) 

Weekly Bible Verse: 

For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind.”  

2 Timothy 1:7

Bye for now! 

'The Adventure' Chapter 1 Rewritten!

Hey Jammers! :D Sarahkey8 here back with another post!
You may remember, last week, I went over my fan fiction, The Adventure! You can view that post here! And today is the day I rewrite it! I'll try to keep it the same length, so don't worry XD

                                         

                                                                     Chapter 1 Velvet's New Bible
 
                                                                              Dove raced to Alpha Headquarters, quickly climbing up the ladder. "Dove! About time!" Ember said as she came in; "Get over here! There have been signs of Phantoms all around Jamaa." Velvet said. "I know, I know." Dove sighed.  "Where were you?" Velvet asked. "Bible study." she replied. "While Jamaa is in danger? Are you crazy!?" Ember exclaimed. "It doesn't matter, what matters is you're here now, we have to discuss what to do about the Phantoms."  said Velvet  "Where have they been spotted?" Dove asked "Around Deep Blue." Ember replied
"Deep Blue? how is that possible?! Tavie has been patrolling that area!" Dove pointed out.
"Tavie is visiting her grandmother." said Velvet "What about the others?" Dove asked "Peck and Greely have been missing. And the others.. well I don't know."  Ember said. "We need to find out where they are and-" suddenly, they have a strange and creepy laugh, The three otters spun around; they were face to face with twenty Phantoms! Dove, being quick as lighting ducked as a tentacle reached to shock her. Velvet let out a gasp as she crumpled to the floor, shocked by a Phantom. "Noo!" Ember screamed, throwing a boomseed at the Phantom who had shocked Velvet, Ember got shocked as well! Dove threw boomseed after boomseed ducking and dodging the Phantoms electricity  that came towards her.
"How come Dove is always the one who never gets shocked?" complained Ember, one again the game was interrupted by Ember complaining.  "I don't know." Dove said, shrugging. Velvet grinned. "I don't know either." she said, suddenly they heard Dove's mom from the house. "Kids! Come inside! It's time for lunch!" "Ten minutes Mrs. Otter?" Ember called back. "No, right now! Your food is going to spoil!" Ember rolled her eyes. Dove frowned at ember
"The Lord commands us to honor our parents and to obey them." Dove reminded her. "You really believe that stuff?" Velvet asked. "Yes, and you should too." Dove said. "You know its not true Velvet, Jamaa was created by Mira and Zios." Ember said crossing her arms.
"No, they founded Jamaa, the Lord created Jamaa, and Mira and Zios, and us, and everything!" Dove replied. "Now c'mon our food is getting cold!" "Its just sandwhiches." Ember muttered. And with that, they climbed down. They all took a seat around the table, and enjoyed a meal of peanutbutter and jelly sandwhiches. "Hey mom, can Ember and Velvet stay a week? Sense schools out for Summer break and all?" Dove asked.
"Its fine with me, but they will have to ask their-" "Parents. We already did!" Ember said with a grin. Mother Otter smiled "You must get your-" "Stuff! Already did! We brought it into Dove's room, we knew you would say yes." Velvet said with a grin. "Okay, I am going to take a nap,l you stay out of trouble!" she said, and went to take a nap.
"Let's go put our stuff in the treehouse!" Dove exclaimed, they ran up to her room, grabbed everything, and headed towards the treehouse. Once they set everything up,  Velvet asked a question. "Hey, uhh Dove?" Velvet asked. "Yes Velvet?" "Do you maybe have a Bible that I could borrow?" Velvet asked.  "Of course! And you can keep it too!"  She pulled out her small golden colored Bible. She handed it to Velvet, Velvet opened it to the begging and gasped. "Dove! This is from your parents!  Are you sure you want to give it to me?!" Velvet asked looking up at Dove. "You are my friend, I have another Bible at home. I want to give it to you, you need it more then me." "Wouldn't you want to give me the other one?" Velvet asked "No." "Ahem! Can't you two talk about this later? This religious stuff is nonsense anyways!" Ember exclaimed.
"Maybe it is, maybe it isn't. But I want to know." Velvet replied.
Ember shook her head. "Okay, where were we in our game?" Dove asked.  "You just got rid of all the Phantoms." Ember replied. Dove ran over to her two friends, she shook them and shook them but nothing worked. Dove looked up. "Dear God, please heal my friends, help them to wake up!" Dove prayed. Suddenly Sir Gilbert the tiger Alpha ran into Alpha Headquarters

"What happened here?" he asked. "Phantoms attacked us! The Phantoms shocked Ember and Velvet!" Dove exclaimed. "They will be alright, the Phantoms lighting of sorts just makes them fall unconscious  for a few hours." Sir Gilbert said. "About four hours by the look of it. While we wait we should call the other Alphas and plan." Sir Gilbert said. Four hours later (or ten seconds in real life) Velvet and Ember got up. "What happened?" they asked.
 "Phantoms came and attacked, they shocked you. " Sir Gilbert said. "Can't believe they would go this far." Ember mumbled. About two hours later, it was time for dinner. "You got the sandwiches?" Ember asked Dove. "Yep!" Dove grabbed her backpack and pulled out three sandwiches.  She gave on to Ember and Velvet, and had one for herself. "How much food do you have?" Ember asked. "Enough to last all of us, we'll have enough." Dove said, "Plus, me and Velvet have some." Ember said. They spread out their sleeping bags.

Hope you enjoyed! Thats all for now Jammers! Bye :D
               


                                        

The Adventure Chapter 1 Review (Rewritten next week!(

Hey Jammers! As you can probably tell from the title, I am going to be redoing The Adventure which if you don't know, is the story that I submitted in Gracie's story contest in 2016, which you can view  here!
 Now, I have been thinking about doing this for a while, but then when Gracie said she is going to rewrite Lizzy's Diary, I made my final decision XD  But first, we will be reviewing it! (Its amazing how much I have improved my writing sense then lol)

First things first...

Chapter 1 Velvet's New Bible

Dove raced to Alpha HQ. She quickly climbed the ladder that led up to it. “Dove! About time!” Ember exclaimed “Get your otter self over here! There have been signs of Phantoms around Jamaa!” Velvet said “I know, I know.” Dove said, sighing, “What were you doing?” Velvet asked “I was at Bible Study.” Dove answered “Bible study?! While Jamaa is in danger? Are you crazy!” Ember exclaimed Velvet looked at Dove. “It doesn't matter. What matters is your here. We need to discuss what to do.” Velvet said.

 “So, where have they been spotted? Dove asked “Around Deep Blue.” Ember answered “Deep Blue?” “How is that possible? Tavie has been patrolling that area.” Dove pointed out. “Well, Tavie went to visit her sick grandmother.” Velvet said grimly.

 “Greely? Peck? Cosmo? Graham? Sir Gilbert?” “Peck, and Greely have been missing.” Ember said. “We need to find out where they are! We need to-” Dove was interrupted by a strange and creepy laugh. The three otters spinned around, they were face to face with twenty Phantoms! Dove, being quick as lighting ducked as a tentacle reached forward to shock her. Velvet got shocked. “Noo!” Ember screamed as she threw a boomseed at the Phantom who shocked her. Suddenly Ember got shocked too! 

I can't find the right words to explain this, but, the uh grammar? Isn't the best 'Suddenly Ember got shocked too!" No commas? Okay then. 

Dove threw Boomseed after Boomseed. Ducking and dodging the bolts that came toward her. Until there were no more. “How come Dove is always the leader?” Complained Ember getting off ) he floor. The game was interrupted once again by Ember complaining. “I don't know.” Dove said shrugging. Velvet grinned. “I don't know either.” she said Suddenly they heard Dove's mom call from the house. “Kids! Come inside! It's time for lunch!” “Ten minutes Mrs. Otter?” Ember called back. “No. Right now! You're food is going to spoil!” Ember rolled her eyes. Dove frowned at Ember. “The Lord commands us to honor our parents, and to obey them.” Dove reminded her. “You really believe that stuff?” Velvet asked sincerely.

 “Yes. And you should too.” Dove said “You know it's not true Velvet. The world was created by Mira and Zios.” Ember said crossing her arms. “No. they founded Jamaa, the Lord created Jamaa. And them, and us, and everything!” Dove said “Now C'mon our food is getting cold!” “Its just sandwiches.” Ember mumbled And with that, they scurried down the treehouse. They all took a seat around the table and enjoyed a meal of PB and J sandwiches. “Hey mom, can Ember and Velvet stay a week? Sense schools out for Summer break and all.” Dove wondered, “It's fine with me, but they will have to ask their-” Mom started “Parents. We already did!” Ember said with a grin. Mother Otter smiled 

Why did I do PB and J... I was lazy, obiously.

“You must get your-” “Stuff. Already did! We brought it into Dove's room. We knew you would say yes.” Velvet said with a grin. Mother Otter looked at the three young otters. “Okay. I am going to take a nap. You stay out of trouble!” And with that, Mother Otter went to take a nap. “Lets go put our stuff in the treehouse!” Dove said, they ran up to her room, grabbed everything (including snacks and soda's) and headed towards the treehouse. Once they set up everything, Velvet asked a question. “Hey, um. Dove?” Velvet asked “Yes Velvet?” Dove asked “Do you maybe have a, well... Bible that I could borrow?”  Velvet asked

 Dove smiled “I sure do! You can keep it too!” Dove exclaimed.  

(including snacks and soda's)  Why is there a ' in sodas? Uhhhh

She went through her backpack and pulled out a small golden colored Bible. She handed it to Velvet. Velvet opened it to the beginning and gasped, “D-Dove! This is from your parents! Including your Dad! Are you sure you want to give it to.... to me?” Velvet asked looked up at Dove with wide eyes. Dove gave her a sad smile. “You are my friend. I have another Bible at home, I want to give this to you. You need it more then me.” Dove explained “Wouldn't you just give me the other one?” Velvet asked “No. At least not now. “Ahem! Can you two talk about this later? 

This religious stuff is nonsense anyway!” Ember exclaimed “Maybe it is, maybe it isn't. But I want to know.” Velvet said. Ember shook her head.

ITS REAL GOLD GUYS

REAL GOLD

But why did I do 'golden colored' I'm sure there is a word for that color... 

Oh yeah and "This is from your parents! Including your Dad!"  

Why would she say parents and then say including your dad? *facepalms* I needed to learn lots.

 “Okay. Where were we in our game?” Dove asked “You just got rid of all the Phantoms.” Ember said “Oh yeah. Okay.” Dove ran over to her two friends. She shook them and shook them but nothing worked. Dove looked up. “Dear God, please heal my friends. Help them to wake up.” Suddenly Sir Gilbert the tiger Alpha ran into Alpha HQ. “What happened here?” he asked “Phantoms attacked us! They shocked Ember and Velvet!” Dove exclaimed “They will be alright, the Phantom's lighting of sorts just makes them fall consensus for hours.” Sir Gilbert said. “How long?” Dove asked. “Eh, four hours by the looks of it.” said Sir Gilbert. So, Dove and Sir Gilbert waited four hours. (Or ten seconds in real life) Velvet and Ember got up. 

Suddenly sir gilbert the tiger alpha ran into alpha hq 

tsk tsk tsk,  still no comas.. Also Dove and Sir Gilbert waited four hours, how about for four hours? I guess it depends.. also how is it 'by the looks of it' Mr. Gilbert? Also that would be awkward if they just waited four hours XD. 

“What happened?” they asked. “Phantoms came and attacked, they shocked you” Sir Gilbert said “Can't believe they would go this far.” Ember mumbled “Let's discuss plans.” Sir Gilbert said. After about two hours of discussing plans, fighting Phantoms, and more, it was time for dinner. “You got the sandwiches?” Ember asked Dove. “Sure do!” Dove grabbed her backpack and pulled out three sandwiches. She gave one to Ember and Velvet and saved one for herself. “How much food do you have?” Ember asked “A lot, don't worry. We'll have enough.” Dove said. “Plus me and Velvet have some.” Ember said. They spread out their sleeping-bags.

This is the end of the chapter.

Oh my goodness, I love how it says 

After about two hours of discussing plans, fighting Phantoms, and more, it was time for dinner.  

Fighting Phantoms and more.

Hehehehe 

You know what, I'm going to do the rewritten version, next week, or this post will be really long! 

You guys: SARAHHHHHHH YOU PROMISED

Me: I never promised! Eek! It was a last minute decision

You guys: 😠😠

Me: *runs*

You guys: Ahem!

Me: OOPS

HERE IS OUR WEEKLY BIBLE VERSE! 

John 3:16 

For God so loved the world that he gave his one and only Son, that whoever believes in him shall not perish but have eternal life. 

Byeee! 

You guys: Ahem! 

Me: Oh yeah! Forgot the siggy! 

Well, that's all for now Jammers! And remember! Stay safe, Jam On, Play Wild, and remember God made you! Byeee!